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Just a single step is all
and one stride no longer takes me far
when traveling toward one's final fall
in search of who you really are.

I find myself far down the trail
with forks aplenty yet to choose
and the consequences they'll entail.
One choice might win, another lose.

Looking back my past seems clear,
unlike as when I walked that path,
a wavering line which leads to here
where I deal with choices' aftermath.

Now I must turn, my path leads on.
Future's mist grows denser as I peer.
I can't make out that final dawn
and wonder if it's far from here.

So here comes yet another stride
into the future's swirling fog.
Who knows fate my choices hide
ere final entry in my log.

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Structured: Western
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You are still looking at that invisible tomorrow, which may reflect today.
Intent clears the fog ahead and promises may make the pathway clearer, but we can only live in the now, there is a choice, you can stop in the now, which will pass or think of the next place to be, it is a choice for you and me.
Go well young man step forward with the pride you carry it is light and will help you .
Yours Ian.T

Ambiguous line didn't rhyme:- I can't make out that final dawn?

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

One can't help but consider the clear as glass past and the unclear future even while trying to live in the now. On and dawn rhyme? It must be a dialect thing because for me at least on and dawn are almost perfect rhyme.But I do agree that line needs more work and I intend to give it more thought. Appreciate the visit..........stan

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