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Tonight and Every Other Night

I don’t know your middle name but,
tonight I imagined us going down to the park,
to tell the moon about our dreams,
and to dance for the stars as they sing to us.

I don’t know your middle name but,
last night I pictured you holding me on my couch
telling me about your childhood.

I don’t know your middle name but,
tomorrow I will plan sewing an 'M' on your hoodie sleeve
and putting a note in your pocket just before you leave.

I don’t know your middle name,
or much else at all but,
in my eyes my love,
you are all mine.

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Interesting that you use "middle name"
last line I believe there is a tiny typo (im) did you mean in?


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I've read three of your 3 poems
you are maddy Madeline or mddy/midday
but poems will shine like moon light
every day
continue to say
what you may
but for worldly success
read and critique/comment
on all poems read
of other poets
have their egos
well fed

The one thing I'm sure about is that "M" is yours no matter what your middle name is
Good job!


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........Robert Frost☺

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Heartfelt piece, I am looking forward to reading more from you!

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the "I don't know your middle name", part! It's something to let us know that you don't know everything, [or a lot] about this fella, but you do know that you have a deep connection with him. I would take a look at a couple of your lines:
"I plan on sewing [an] M on you[r] hoodie sleeve." [Delete the [will]. And: "[in] my eyes..." Nice write, and very relatable.
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