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Titty-Bear and Cotton-Candy Heart...

Submitted by Geezer on Sun, 2021-02-14 09:52

On nights when you are asleep
And I can't close my eyes
I lie there thinking and I weep
Because I am not so wise

I can't tell how much I love you
There are no words to say
I'm so grateful you said "I do"
I'll love you everyday

On my chest is a Titty-Bear
Close to my beating heart
I had them put it there
And then I had it start

Heart full of cotton-candy
Sweet as any rhyme
Heart of cotton-candy is just dandy
Keeping time with mine

Style / type:

Structured: Western

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Review Request (Direction):

What did you think of my title?

How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Last few words:

For my wife on Valentine's Day

Editing stage:

Not actively editing

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Geezer

Sun, 2021-02-14 10:49

Had to say it...

for the rhyme and because I'm not so wise as to be able to tell her how much I love her. ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

author comment

Geezer

Sun, 2021-02-14 14:33

Thank you Teddy...

I know that you feel this and understand what it is to love so much. ~ Geez.
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chima ononogbu

Sun, 2021-02-14 14:38

So touchy

Nothing is ever enough for one so dear and so loving.

Bathe yourself with poetry and let the world go to pieces.

Lavender

Mon, 2021-02-15 13:20