Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

Titty-Bear and Cotton-Candy Heart...

On nights when you are asleep
And I can't close my eyes
I lie there thinking and I weep
Because I am not so wise

I can't tell how much I love you
There are no words to say
I'm so grateful you said "I do"
I'll love you everyday

On my chest is a Titty-Bear
Close to my beating heart
I had them put it there
And then I had it start

Heart full of cotton-candy
Sweet as any rhyme
Heart of cotton-candy is just dandy
Keeping time with mine

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Last few words: 
For my wife on Valentine's Day
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

for the rhyme and because I'm not so wise as to be able to tell her how much I love her. ~ Geez.
.

It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

author comment

I know that you feel this and understand what it is to love so much. ~ Geez.
.

It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

author comment

Nothing is ever enough for one so dear and so loving.

Bathe yourself with poetry and let the world go to pieces.

Hi, Geezer,
"Heart full of cotton candy." A very sweet Valentine! Your love and great devotion are felt throughout!
Thank you!
L

You ladies are among my biggest fans and I am always glad to hear what you have to say. [It's always good!] I am almost ashamed of your praise, [at least bashful, I blush when I read your comments!] Thank you all, for being so supportive. Yes, I love my wife very much and I am glad that it shows. ~ Geez.
.

It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

author comment

I hope you both had a wonderful Valentine's Day!
L

(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.