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The Tiny Dream

eyes crossed
tease dotted
stripes lost
tossed
and besotted
the bees lost
the eyes have it
blind as they may be

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the honey
sweet as it is
can be found with the odd sting
and the most difficult of defense

thank you!

as is Esker's.
Your wordchoice, wordcrafting and inimicable style make suggestions superfluous.

That's cool, I can just sit back and enjoy.
Ta.

cheers,
Jess
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