Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

Tinseltown

It's like a drum pounding on my torso

Fear reaching out from within my trembling body

Shaking me into a panic

And mind, well it just won't quiet

I cannot close my thoughts

They're wide open
Waiting to be fed by my imagination

The wind gale force
Knocking on my skull

All the while
I try so hard just to sleep.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Panic attack.
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

Teddy, you too? I guess that is the agony and the ecstasy creative people must bear at all hours. But those intruding sparks of the imagination are so delicious. I always welcome them. Nice poem, Mrs. Teddy,
Jerry

Thanks so much for your encouraging words.

Thank you...Teddy

author comment

or just nap? I nap throughout the night. An hour and a half at a time. Sometimes, I get up and write down something that particularly makes an impression on me and that I may want to use for a poem. Most times, I just think about remembering it. Once in a while, I get lucky and the thought remains throughout the night and I make something of it when I sit to write. I guess that if you tremble and fear that it may make you want to truly sleep without those thoughts. I wish for you, an unbroken
nights sleep. ~ Geez.
.

Come to chat every Thursday - 3:30 to 4:30 pm. EST.
With: c Lynn Brooks and Geezer

I have indulged in something much more serious than just not sleeping, after becoming a mother my sleep pattern is much shorter. However if I tell you this was a live panic attack at 3 am this morning it may even make more sence. It's something I never ever had an experience with until last summer. And last night, so I took the opportunity to make a positive stand. I posted it straight away and I went to.sleep sound. Weird how the mind works that's for sure. I appreciate your time on this, I bet you will see more now, ps the title , well after all the drama I needed a star title.

Thank you...Teddy

author comment

what if you were to replace the word shaking with trembling
then trembling with shaking
all you need do is reverse the order try it see if you like it
fear can work on a person to a breaking point

Join us for the new workshop on Critique basic sign up now

join us for chat every [email protected];30 pm est

Thank you, I like it better myself now.
Panic attacks aren't nice but of course there are worse things.
My son and I got into a fight with a jelly fish or two on Wednesday we were stung numerous times, actually I was scared for him because he had never been burned before but he was proud, and I stayed very calm and used armonia But in the night my fear arrived. It's all good now and he has a great story for his friends.

Thank you...Teddy

author comment
(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.