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Timeless Love

Waiting, longing for love, slowed time.
Quietly sitting dormant like a volcano,
the slow pace of time tormented my soul.
I failed to see the signs appearing before my eyes.

The passage of time, darkened my sorrow,
like the night sky bringing sadness to a few.
Day after day my soul bides time.
For all things to pass.

Time did not rest, finding love was quickly fading.
The cycle of time awakened my soul,
to a clear knowledge of a time past.
Bonding time and love eternally.

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about your poem, I like these lines:

Time did not rest, finding love was quickly fading.
The cycle of time awakened my soul,
to a clear knowledge of a time past.
Bonding time and love eternally.

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Nice delivery. The wording has a certain amount ambiguity; are you asserting these statements or asking questions of yourself both conscious and unconscious. I suspect it’s both and that’s probably what I love about it. For my tastes I’d take it without revision but I would also advise that creative endeavors are like endeavors in love and sometimes need a lot of time to develop and also need to be malleable over the course of time. Keep up the good work.

Tim

The only thing that can make your poetry powerful and enticing is great imagery. I can confirm to you, it's
obvious in this poem. And that's a good one.

Keep searching for a true love. Tough time never last but tough people do. If your heartthrob is not forth coming rethink and find a better sweet heart. A true love doesn't come by 'quietly sitting dormant like volcano'.
You must step out of your comfort zone and seek what you desire. It doesn't matter how long you had spent seeking it. Remain resolute to your goal and work hard and your thought will come to fruition.

Emotive, poignant and heart felt! Beautifully crafted !

"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

Thanks Jackweb for your comments. !!!

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