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In a single moment, I closed my eyes
thinking of the past that we've left behind

We have come a long way, my dear,
to find our path to each other

We have fought and reconciled,
we've even separated for awhile

And each time we leave, saying "Never again",
Fate will bring us back together again

Even after the years drift us further apart,
moments that we shared never leave our hearts

Our youths are gone ,weary skin cast over old bones,
still we find beauty is not something to mourn

For love is still there, still burning bright.
the passion still strong, still alive

That's how I know, this feeling is not lust,
it will remain even after we're turned to dust

It'll be there even after the winds of fate erase
our existence and lay us to waste

It will leave traces of our footprints behind,
right there, engraved on the sands of time

The tale of our hearts' triumph here
may it be a legacy in our future

For in all of its elegance,
our love is timeless....

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Just like my another year, these memories are cherished, they last for ever no matter what happens between the meets.
A challenge to me where that part is there and I am here know how you feel. On St Patricks day this year it was a memory that has lasted half of my life here.
My present wife though it not necessary still treats the memory as a threat, but all it gives me is a quiet peace and realisation of how beautiful things are here and where ever my world is.
Take care and live in the now, Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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