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Time to think!

Submitted by Leslie on Fri, 2023-05-19 14:00

Maybe, just maybe
movement,
space and
matter
rolled up in a little ball
are tucked away,
in a corner of the multiverse
Left alone to find
thier own unique expression
As they grow into conciousness
And are displayed in thier innocence
As children of thier higher power!

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Editing - rough draft

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Not Explicit Content

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neopoet

Fri, 2023-05-19 14:00

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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Time to think!" offers a thought-provoking perspective on the origins and development of the universe. The imagery of movement, space, and matter being rolled up in a little ball and tucked away in a corner of the multiverse is both intriguing and mysterious. The idea that these elements are left alone to find their own unique expression is a refreshing departure from more traditional creation narratives.

The poem's use of language is simple but effective, with each line building upon the previous one to create a sense of wonder and awe. The phrase "children of their higher power" provides a compelling conclusion to the piece, suggesting that the universe is not just a random collection of atoms, but rather a purposeful creation with a greater meaning.

One suggested line edit would be to replace "thier" with "their" in the fifth and sixth lines, to ensure consistency in spelling. Overall, "Time to think!" is a well-crafted poem that challenges readers to consider the mysteries of the universe and our place within it.

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Obadiah Grey

Sun, 2023-05-21 12:47