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Time Slaves...

Submitted by Roscoe Lane on Thu, 2012-06-28 06:11

Time slaves..

Who made man a slave to time, life
like sad printed lines without music
or rhyme.

So immersed are we in this uncaring
bondage of speed, allowing in only that.
We steal fleeting moments of pleasure
as the second hand collects our breath.

Do we need a slow ticking down of
our dreary days, or the sprinting hands
that steal what happiness we may
encounter from birth to death.

Under the crush of circumstance we may
stutter, but always we must exist inside the
written truth of the words, that some would
like stricken from our freedom of speech.

No boldness is needed in our wakened lives,
or subtle creative phrases some would use to
try and mould, we are shapers of self, our
dreams must remain in sleep, as we have
a belief in the reality of a true goal we,…can reach.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Clear your thoughts of doubt....
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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scribbler

Fri, 2012-06-29 13:57

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Great minds must think alike as I just finished one called "alarm clock blues" lol. It Does seem the faster we go the behinder we get. We work to obtain toys then have no time to play with them because we have to work to pay for them. Would be funny if not true. Thanks for posting this........................stan

Roscoe Lane

Sat, 2012-06-30 03:41

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Can't wait to read it, and yes it does seem that to much time is spent around work. Either travelling to and from, or actually working. Thanks for commenting . Regards Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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Ian.T

Sat, 2012-06-30 04:18

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Loved and myself have for a while been bouncing our views of time around,
If only we were brave enough to let it slip Time that is, no more Tic Tock..
I argue with him that time is man made and not a dimension, how can we say it is a dimension, how can we be so egoistic..
As you know I talk to the fairies lol and the friends I have there, say that there is no time.
If I should leave this space and place to journey on it will be like stepping into where ever I wish to be, and the ones that journeyed on before will gather there as I knew them, this is only for as long as it takes to become use to that world, of timelessness and unconditional love.
I have been asked to write of this place and it is hard but will put my mind to it very soon, watch this space.
Your write was excellent and showed the flaws in our stupid fixation with time, thank you, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Roscoe Lane

Tue, 2012-07-03 15:48

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Time is something else that is manipulated, as a young man your told at school. This is your chance and time to learn about how you'll live when you leave school. We're incouraged to learn english, maths, sciences, etc, this will prepare you for the outside world. I wish i'd stuck in at sport, look at the chances there are now. But of we go to work, and we're governed by time again, paid by the hour, extre money if you do overtime etc. And like the blink of an eye, your staring at the end of time. Instead of seeing what's round about us that really matters. Sorry i'm off on a rant. Thnk you Ian Regards Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

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