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The Time Farewell.

Though you are on your way,
Deep in my heart I wish you could stay.
Our past years together seem like only days.
For this farewell I do not want to say.

Time flows like water without turning.
In the blink of an eye you are leaving.
Our time together was not surfficient
But we also did spend it efficient.

You are leaving in my heart a hole
For I do not know what our future holds.

As we float along as we path alone,
Me we never forget our parting song.
Even if Time flees and moments pass.
Me we keep each other in Our hearts

My dismal is caused by the departure tear
Rushes memories of stolen moments we share,
For with you an everlasting bond I share
and forever for you I shall care

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It's always hard to say goodbye.Especially to the one you were intimate with.Also we part with old friends so that new ones could come in.A lovely and emotional poem,Betrand Ndomenang.Thanks for sharing .

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