That was wonderful.
I bow for the master of poetry, and my guide

Well, well, well, if it isn't the elf from hell. Jess' kidding, of course, without remorse.

Jess, just seeing your name here made my heart dance! The poem, I'm not too crazy about, because we're creatures of great greatness and much weakness, and must add both ingredients to our humble pie.

Love,
~Anna

Just knowing the inner neurons are firing is divine enough for me.

Love you more.

~A

I guess I'll need to thicken my hide and keep my pencil extra sharp now lol. I think your poem does a good job of declaring that All are of value and worthy of being listened to. There are none "ordinary". the only change in your poem which comes to mind would be in the first line.Maybe something like: By 3 a. m.'s deep lack of light. BTW hope you were not affected by the flooding..................scribbler

Jess,

I have to say the wait for you to return was worth it. Great come-back write my friend.

From memory, this poem feels different...can't quite put my finger on it (but different in a good way).

And what is up with this line:

So I'll get up and sometimes shave
and try not to misbehave

...I am sure you sometimes shave but has there been a day yet when you have behaved?...Lol!

regards,

HS

Just your signature line is worth more than all the trouble a weirdelf can get into, shaved or naked
as the day he was born. But, I am curious , how do elves *get born*? Ego first?

;-)

,

Look out Jess is back !!! Hi you old sod, nice to see you back. Great poem .

Love Lou

I like the content and the poem for the most
part, but something was bothering me about the
flow ... for me, I think it's the last line of each stanza,
they jarred the read for me, perhaps it was your
intention to give the reader a moment of reflection,
but it seemed to me that each of those last lines
could be smoother with added words, but it may be
something I would do and not necessarily any sort
of improvement ... anyway, good to see you back.

Richard

Very interesting, because the meter is wonderful ... including the unexpected shortened last line in each verse.

If there WAS a momentary awkwardness for me, it would be in verse 2, lines 2 and 3 where the meter changed for me:

"how did he come up with that theory?"
or "where do his ideas come from?"

I might change line 2 to

"how'd he come up with that theory?"

and remove one syllable from the next line.

Incidentally, line two by itself works perfectly. The meter is altered because the last syllable/ beat ( "y " from "query") of line 1 actually drops into becoming the first syllable / beat of line 2.

Also, I'd try using another word instead of "misbehave" which works well from a rhyme point of view but felt... odd... for someone at 3am....

... well, maybe not! lol

Just some random thoughts.

Enjoyed the overall feel of this one, including the sense of purposelessness of one suddenly feeling he has nothing to say.

Psyve

Misbehave rhymes with shave crave and ok ... how could it *jar*?

I however, would have used a much stronger word than *misbehave*, though it would not have so many words with which to rhyme.

Ain't misbehaving? http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ec0Es-Hdpn0&feature=related

~A

I have not been sticking on glue
So nice to see you too
How have you been
Around the bend again

Jess Elf so nice to see you back mate and how the heck are you? I hope to read more of your work and you can tear my stuff apart too for after all is said and done it all gets stuffed back together again

LOL

Hope all is well by you and nice to see you on board.

Love and Peace
Magics

I'm glad to see you. My heart leaped a few feet when I saw your name.
Great write. I loved it. Truly heartfelt. I think it's perfect and needs no improvements. Though nothing is perfect and everything can benefit from improvements.

Welcome back

I wondered where you went, I asked around, but no reply.
I guess this poem is just a warmup for you, It's as if you had a self realization. I really don't think you needed too self realize. So is this just a test of the waters (Sorry couldn't help it.)
I'm just glad to see you back, neopoet just became a little more Interesting.
Welcome Buddy!!
Fast Eddie Esq.

to see you Jess, I haven't been doing as much as I was, but am trying to get back on track. I feel different, and I suppose I am. I don't think you are any more self aware than anyone else, just a little more articulate, and eager to share. But I'm no therapist. Anyways, good to see you working again. ~ Gee

You won't like this I am almost positive of it, but this cements what I thought about you all along, you are as human as the rest of us, and you love hard, shy, holding your breath ,succumbing a bit even give in on occasion. This is one of your better works to me, no licking of arm pits here even though that one was self explanatory to those who feel the need to test that ever over quote ' I love you body and soul and would die for you but wouldn't;t lick your arm out - liars!!. This was the JESS ,the real man you keep hiddrn for your hearts sake. need Ia say more?

Kim(V)

Hello WeirdElf,
Each moment now is all I crave

is a great finishing line, the poem leads to it logically.

I am not sure if addition of the words that it is okay makes it any more clear. In fact, I would not use it.
It is trivializing and diminishing the key conclusion.
Based on the rhythm of the poem, you keep your struggle under control accepting the transition and refocusing on conscientious presence.
It is a great write I relate to.
I can hear your armor clanks, solder of words, lord of meter, have a nice evening.

how you do away with that sort of finery and preciousness, your honesty is so bold and striking: I used to hear dull people query
"how'd he come up with that theory?",
"where do his ideas come from?"
but now I look around, eyes bleary,
and ask the same.

A huge blow to my rampant pride,
but now there's nowhere I can hide
I'm just an ordinary man
with nothing special deep inside.
That is the price.

I love that. That is trademark Jess.

The whole thing has a Bardic majesty to it, besides