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Three Poems of 8/8/12
1. Time and Space is an Illusion
For three days she and her tribe
wandered from star to star,
they saw many moons rising and falling
from the center of the universe.
Near the end of their journey,
their silence became overwhelming:
Earth had come into view, and the
blue-green dot was amazing, its white
encapsulating the sea foam they had
read about a thousand centuries ago,
before they had set out to discover
the only planet that was worshiped from afar,
for they were the first of their kind.
2. All There Is
On the sea of tranquility
a bubble
rises up
from the fissure of a lucid earth
beneath all there is.
Hello?
Is anybody in here?
3. Raptured
Long long long ago,
before there was snow,
before the ape learned to talk
and grew too tall
to walk on his knuckles
or to live bearing her heart
for all to see,
my soul raptured with yours.
An echo emerged from this darkness and the
silence
that was to come,
I've been looking for
you ever since
in the patterns of the wayward breeze
as it comes to me.
Last few words:
I wrote these poems this morning on different poetry sites, realized it's only one poem-three parts- in its truest sense, and so I post it here as it came to me, as it came to be.
~A
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Comments
judyanne
Wed, 2012-08-08 14:33
dear anna
this is awesome
one tiny nit (got me anyway)
‘their silence became overwhelming’
it is probably just me, but I find this line a tad bulky – and I think it is the word ‘became’ along with the gerund
maybe simply ‘silence overwhelmed’ ?
I so love the finish
‘I've been looking for
you ever since
in the patterns of the wayward breeze
as it comes to me.’
love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Kailashana2
Thu, 2012-08-09 08:15
Who would I be if some words
Who would I be if some words weren't annoying, frustrating or discombobulating. ;-)
Thanks for reading and your comment Judy, one love is all we have in any case.
Hug
~A
author commentscribbler
Thu, 2012-08-09 17:19
hi
Yep they work well as a single poem. Especially liked the 1sy one. "as it came to me as it came to be"Ha! I'll turn you to a rhymer yet lol............stan
Kailashana2
Thu, 2012-08-09 19:12
Hahaha! You don't pay good
Hahaha! You don't pay good attention do you? I rhyme on occasion inside, outside, downside, upside and up yours. ;-)
~A
author commentNordic cloud
Sat, 2013-02-02 14:58
I too like this very much
I too like this very much Anna, I wasn't around on the net at the time this was posted, I haven't got around to seeing much of what was posted during that time, but I happened on this, looking for a particular poem of yours, and love it, cannot analyse it in any way, technically but the content, was very particular, and fascinating as a story.
The poem I cannot find looks as it it might be called Poem?
it starts:-
If only
love can be
seen only - -
this boundary of flesh
of skin and bone and a thin
red line of hope
I rather wanted to see what others said about it too, I said something.
Happy if you could give me the title.
Hoping all is well over there, love to you's Ann.
"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.
Kailashana2
Wed, 2013-02-27 10:36
Thank you Ann. It's
Thank you Ann. It's interesting to read some of the old poems I've completely forgotten.
This is a good one, I think. Yesterday I wrote one that Barry said *Yuk* to. I didn't think it
was.... t h a t....bad. He can be such a ***** sometimes.
:-)
author commentNordic cloud
Wed, 2013-02-27 11:11
Yuk makes it sound
Yuk makes it sound interesting dear Anna!
we all see and feel in different ways,
so maybe someone else will read it differently.
Nice to have someone with an opinion close to you too though!!
So many are not so very interested in poetry at all.
Love to you both, Ann.
"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.
Kailashana2
Wed, 2013-02-27 11:17
I think more and more people
I think more and more people are *interested* in poetry, much of it as important and uninteresting as social media. Some of it as important as the social media that brought about the *Arab Spring*.
I've always say, between the two of us, Barry is the more natural poet, he just sees things in ways that most people don't. He's left-handed you know. :-)
Love to you Ann, I read the Teahouse on occasion too.
~Anna
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