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A thousand sighs until tomorrow

as yesterdays hand
slips off my shoulder,
and tomorrows embrace
takes my lips

in this, today
I breathe a thousand
sighs and soar
a breathless wind

I’ve heaved the night
until the day broke

and stood in the middle
of all and nothing

and now,
I live
in the milliseconds
between this world

and the next

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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The temporal references JC..."as yesterdays hand slips off my shoulder"...almost personifying time...great!

Ells x

Glad you liked this one its an old one ive been working on still needs a little work but I will get round to it eventually its a work in progress lol

love JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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A beautiful write,where the time of past is gone, and you say we live in that Milli second between two worlds, this later part I am not liking, it is as if you are standing on the edge of a cliff, some lives are balanced like this, and your write is still great on this part. Though I hope this is not a feeling from your life, if so step back away from that cliff edge in your mind, build a fence that will guard you against falling over.
I shall send you some strong bricks, and a strong metal fence so there, Yours Ian.T
PS:- Did you ever see "The Village of the Damned" film taken from the book "The Midwitch Cuckoo's" by John Windom where to stop the children seeing what he was doing the teacher built a wall in his mind, well the one I send will be stronger than that lol..

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I have seen the village of the damned about a million years ago god I forgot that movie existed, I will be ok I think in some ways we all live in each moment making whatever choices we think we need to make, this ones been worked on for a while I am still not a hundred percent happy with the format I may take it back to the drawing board and reformat it

very happy you liked it thanks for the read and the comment

love always JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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My comment was more of a worry from this old one the poem is fine lol.
John Wyndham's " book "The Chrysalids" is one of his better stories, I must have been quite young when I read it as with the others of his, as "War of the Worlds" by "H.G Wells" scared part of America when it was broadcast so they had a scare in Australia when someone saw a massive shape in the Ocean out there and thought it was a Kraken lol ????
Have a lovely evening, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Thank you for caring .... I haven't read the chrysalids I will have to look for it at the library ... I remember the scare in America but I don't remember the Kraken lol

Love always Jc xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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Sometimes the words just rush out
Sometimes they are like pulling teeth

The second lot of of words were the
Beginning of getting ill

Thanks for the read and comment

Love Jc xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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but is millisecond one word?
When milli is seperate does it remind one of a millipede?
Am I being a pedant?
Does it matter?

Not sure of if its one of two words
I will check and make sure

I thought it was one word hmmm

Thanks for the read and comment

Jc xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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Ah yes that ephemeral moment of Now. Well captured. One suggestion as to structure :
I breathe a thousand sighs
and soar
abreathless wind.........................kinda keeps the thought in order I think................stan

Ha I had those lines that way to start with
I will reformat later on thanks for the read
And comment

Love Jc xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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generously tis for free
as profound is your poetry

loved

Ahhhhhh thank you sighs are compliments

Very glad you liked this one

Love Jc xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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beautifully executed

a couple of suggestions for my fav part of the poem

'and now,
I live
in the Milli seconds
between this word
...and the next'

'milliseconds' is one word... and why have you capitalised it?

and i keep wanting the end to read
'and now,
I live
in the milliseconds
between this word
... and this'

lol - just me
hugs
judd
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

I see what you mean but this word ... and this ... I have just fixed up milliseconds I thought I had it as one word its funny what the mind wants us to see, and I also changed the ending I may go back and change it again this is very much a work in progress its taken over two years to get to here

love and hugs Jayne-Chloe xxx

p.s its very nice to see you :))

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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