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thought for the day

running in place gets you nowhere
hiding out does the same
missing out on what life has to offer
methinks is a bloody shame

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I'm thinking that this is a short and nicely put together poem.
Geezer.
.

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

literally wrote it off the cuff. appreciate your positive input.

valene

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Though provoking short poem...
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raj (sublime_ocean)

...a supine potion
would best serve your purpose, methinks
you've need of weed
for nowt's guaranteed
to give you the utmost of winks.

i could say more,
but i'm too zonked
-already today i've thricely been bonked.

Best wishes....val..

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:)

raj (sublime_ocean)

v
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I like it, but could you give it a bit more punch?
I like punching.

Aeron
If poetry doesn't change anything it isn't anything.

i'm not certain punching is required here but i appreciate your input. i said what was in me head at the time and believe it got me point across.

thanks Aeon.

val

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Live life to the full - it doesn't last long!

Sharp and concise - a good reminder and absolutely true!

Thanks for sharing! :)

Love Mand xxxx

thanks mand for taking the time to share your thoughts! the older i get the more i realize i should have had the courage to take more risks and not be concerned what others have to say. i allowed my 30 year marriage to get in the way. but once i mustarded up my gumption to ask my ex for a trial separation and then we both agreed divorce would help keep our friendship in tact, i finally had the time to start to get to know 'me,' the person i'd kept hidden for all those years. that's when i finally started to try things i never even considered. i'm still a work in progress and that's a good feeling!

val

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:) I hope you have many, many happy years to come! :) :)

Love to you

Mand xxx

I wish the same for you :)!

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I like the off-rhyme of "offer" and "nowhere." it's an inspiring poem. thanks!

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