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A Thought

Judge not what thou hast oft in sight,
as deep must live the soul.
Thy naked eyen might tell thee lies,
whilst hearts shall tell it all.

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Just experimenting a less modern language. Hope you don't mind it. :)
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Very thoughtful poem about trusting the heart call.

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

So kind of you to drop in with such a nice comment.
I always thought the English less modern language is really charming.

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i appreciate your intent to innovate. Keep it up please.

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raj (sublime_ocean)

eyen....?

is the less modern word for "eyes" Loved.

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Twix your God and the essence of all things, is a domain we shall call Heaven, because it is too beautiful for any other word.
That we shall dwell within this domain in perfection, is a task that we must try to achieve.
There shall be only a love of an energy that will eclipse all other things, there we shall be free of all man made stupidity,
Yours as always, Ian

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

totally agree. I like how you've said it all.

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On anything.
The language you mimic is Old English.

W. H. Snow

A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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Like it? :)

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but 'soul' and ''all'' is a weak rhyme (imo)
lol - it may be my aussie accent, but i think
''whilst hearts shall tell the whole.' might work better ???

this little beautie trips awesomely over the tongue when read aloud
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

my Arabic accent judyanne.
Let me think abt. this for some time. I am really happy with it at the moment.
I am happy you're back to pick on mine. (smiles)

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I love all that you write even with the occasional flaw. It's a good poem even without the new language.

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I like how concisely you wrote this poem. A moral in verse--very lovely

The poet only asks to get his head into the heavens. It is the logician who seeks to get the heavens into his head. And it is his head that splits.~G.K. Chesterton

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