I am probably going to be told that all suggestions for this image laden poem will somehow mess with its meter lol. But being the timid soul I am, here goes anyway :
stanza 1
l-2 delete either groaning of gray(I know you were going for alliteration but this sounds forced to me)
l-3 quiver seems the wrong word
l-4 delete let
l-5 delete hovering
l-6 try : rolling noisilt about his air-quake
Stanza 2
l-2 delete clear (redundant0
l-6 fractured seems wrong word
stanza 3
l-1 delete fresh taste of
Many of these ideas are in keeping with the "less is more" theme. Sometime a poet can insert too much imagery in a single line

I think you used Thor well in describibg the storm now I hope my head doesn't get too thor from getting bashed lol.............stan

I like the simple one word title. But I am unsure of this line:

as he slams his hammer on the floor of heaven

as Thor is a Norse God of mythology, I don't think "heaven" is appropriate... would it be Valhallah?

I do so love your vivid imagery as evidenced here:

shattering the crystal clear veil
reverberation of the impact is paralysing, awe-inspiring
I glimpse flashes of brilliant-white forks
and flickering silver tongues
sparking through shivers of fractured waters

pleased don't change the groaning gray... I think it works!

always, Cat

Sorry I didn't get back to you sooner. I have come down with a nasty chest cold and it has kept me off my computer. Sharing this illness with Steve as he brought it home to me.

In the context you mean them I would say "the heavens"

always, Cat

Juddy , I admire your wide knowlage of many subjects and the variety of your writing which daily reflects in your poetry and this is not an exception of course.

On the other hand..
I have come to your piece more than once (almost daily) since you've posted .To be honest, I wanted to be the first to comment and give suggestions as you always are the first to leave on mine, unfortunately, it was so difficult but I know it is only me as I don't know much in methicals, so I needed to google about this Thor which is my fault as you see.
However , I believe you could have done it a bit easier if you've not stuffed so many *Not so familier words* . I had to check the dictionary many times to grasp your intent and descriptions..

I know I am not a native like reader but I believe even those with moderate knowladge of the language won't find it easy..
I know such profound language adds to the piece's credits yet you've to consider all the levels if you want to be widely read (IMO)
Please forgive me as I carried on but that's only because I like to read what you craft..

See my signature. I am always after learning new things whenever time allows.

I came back to try to find a suggestion for a word to replace "fractured " water. I also determined the reason fractured seems wrong. Something can be fractured yet still loosely joined together. Might you try shattered instead? imo it might more closely describe the rain which is jolted by thor's hammer blow. And I know this isn't sandwich form but maybe I'll be fogiven

"He rumbles in the distant haze
feet heavy
in the groaning grey..........................could this have an S then the following lines single: grumble and quiver?
that grumbles and quivers -"

Ow I experienced this, I am not in the group so 'scuse I.

I liked the imagery, some of it quite new to me, in this very
evocative of Thor, he is an awesome 'phenomenon.'
Pronounced Toor in Norwegian, they don't have a "th" sound.

annanya