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THINGS YOU SAY
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THINGS YOU SAY
Oh , I knew you wouldn’t go without a whisper,
And I knew you wouldn’t go without a scene-
A love that was burning out, not turning crisper:
A love that might as well have never been…
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Oh, you bore me to the seams
With your sorrows and your dreams,
And the tales of things you gave up just for me-
You tell me when I came,
That I was bound in mental chains,
But you never really tried to set me free!
And I'm going…
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You say it hurts so much
For you to speak about your past,
And then you tell me of the many things you've lost-
You tell me when I came
That I was blind and I was lame,
But you give me sight and freedom at what cost!
And I'm gone…
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Comments
mona
Thu, 2011-01-13 14:21
Do you really want the raw truth about this poem?
Do you really want the raw truth about this poem?
Ok here you are: I love it.:)))
The flow of words amazing and deep
Mona Rose
Psyve
Thu, 2011-01-13 14:26
Mona
Thank you, glad you enjoyed this one.
Psyve
Kailashana2
Thu, 2011-01-13 16:48
Adding this to my favourites.
Adding this to my favourites. The list grows longer....
~A
Psyve
Fri, 2011-01-14 03:45
Anna,
Thank you for reading / listening to this one and commenting.
Am flattered you are adding this to your favourites list. :-)
Psyve
scribbler
Thu, 2011-01-13 19:08
things
break ups are caused by many reasons and seldom go smoothly. Very enjoyable...................scribbler
Psyve
Fri, 2011-01-14 03:46
Scribbler,
Thank you for stopping by to comment.
Pleased you found this an enjoyable read.
Psyve
Psyve
Sat, 2011-01-15 14:00
Seren
Thank you for listening and reading. Pleased you enjoyed this one.
Psyve
Psyve
Sat, 2011-01-15 15:56
Shirley,
Am glad you enjoyed this song.
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.
Psyve
lou
Sat, 2011-01-15 15:51
hi
a sad comment on the state of a relationship. good job.
lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Psyve
Sat, 2011-01-15 15:54
Lou,
Thnks for stopping by and commenting.
Psyve
mand
Sat, 2011-01-15 16:13
Hi Psyve
I love the raw emotion you put into your poetry. I could imagine this piece being acted out on the stage! and the tense atmosphere would have the audience rivited.
You held my attention in a dynamic way.
Well done
Love Mand xxxxxxx