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they say to right what you feel...

Submitted by scooby on Wed, 2018-04-18 17:08

I hid a note
underneath my shelf yesterday,
it's in my throat,
stuck on all the things I'm scared to say.

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Editing - rough draft

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Lord Barham

Thu, 2018-04-19 23:11

with delightful irony at the end

Geezer

Fri, 2018-04-20 10:11

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very much! I do believe that the use of the word [right] was purposeful and was meant to say, that one should try to [right] the wrongs of the world?
But be careful!
~ Geezer.
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