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There's nothing in the night like the sound of the wind

When all the land is sleeping tight
There is a sound within the night
A noise to touch the sinews of your mind.
To those who hear it at its best
Exalt its sound, as others rest,
And thank the Lord he gave it to mankind.

She hums and blows her gentle breezes,
Comes and goes just as she pleases,
Spreads pastoral verses as her theme;
And when the twilight fills the air
Her vivid strains are ever there
For anyone who worships her esteem.

Her voice caresses mighty trees,
Bends their limbs with awesome ease,
Oaks submit and beeches stand-a-quiver.
She shakes their leaves when passing through,
Sings a chorus just for you,
A symphony of joy to make you shiver.

At times when anger doth prevail
She tests her strength and blows a gale
She proves the very essence of her skill.
She fans her substance all around,
Her lusty bluster so profound,
She punishes the ground with all her will.

But she knows it's daylight soon
So then she sings a different tune
And bestows a temperate ballad clear and bright;
And when the darkness leaves the earth
She whistles warm for all she's worth;
There's no sound like the wind makes in the night.

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I find no fault in your writing . Love reading your work

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for your kind comment. It is always good to hear what you have to say.
My compliments to you.

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To master the olden ways. I appreciate it after milling through all the modern poetry anthologies wondering if anything written in any form is now poetry, with or without any subject ...I’d rather listen to Shubert over Bartok. The only comment I could possibly make is having mastered the 19th century, which requires craft and study, you are ready to step up to our times. That is not easy, when your muse drives to where you are comfortable.( If anything I would here drop the “doth”.) I think now having accomplished what you have I would love to see a poem in our modern tradition which borrows from the part but not imitates it.
Love to see “you” in it as well, a different more modern stance the poet choosing a more private stance with a modern landscape. I’m sure you will produce most curios and good poetry as well.

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

Thank you ever so much for your critique. I appreciate the time spent reading and commenting. I know that your critique is well thought out and sincere. I love the 19th. and early 20th. century poets (as you will have guessed). I don't know if I dare say a golden age but very nice to embrace.

I wondered about using 'doth' and I will probably find a substitute to replace it so thanks for drawing my attention to it.

Of course, I can't tell you how valuable critique like yours is to me and others

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Critique is a compliment
Kind regards, Alan
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author comment

To master the olden ways. I appreciate it after milling through all the modern poetry anthologies wondering if anything written in any form is now poetry, with or without any subject ...I’d rather listen to Shubert over Bartok. The only comment I could possibly make is having mastered the 19th century, which requires craft and study, you are ready to step up to our times. That is not easy, when your muse drives to where you are comfortable.( If anything I would here drop the “doth”.) I think now having accomplished what you have I would love to see a poem in our modern tradition which borrows from the past but not imitates it.
Love to see “you” in it as well, a different more modern stance the poet choosing a more private stance with a modern landscape. I’m sure you will produce most curios and good poetry as well.

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

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