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There she was...

There she was...

There she was.
Listening to the sound of the sea,
waiting nothing but a whisper,
followed by another one.

The sea, merciless, spoke to her,
speechless and still,
refusing to verbalize any sound or word;
refusing to show any sign of response.

There she stood,
motionless as the plain sea,
torn to pieces by the absent tide,
washed away by the stillness of the waves,
blown to parts by the silent sea.

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it is very nice to meet you! somehow I feel a kinship with the subject of your poem! please feel welcome here. I look forward to reading more of your exquisite poetry!

*hugs, Cat

When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

Thank you for your kind words.

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Just read your latest & had to jump straight into your first one.

I like your style, allowing the reader to create the images & theme to fit their own outlook & ideas,

Keep them coming, you have a fan.

Talent free poet! Love it!!

One

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"with all that I am & all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me"

Thank you for your words!

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But just two points
two whispers
too close
and
after a comma
use a small letter
bit of grammar only

Thank you for your words. I´ll edit that.

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