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THERE IS A HOME
@YungPrinzeT
27/06/2017
THERE IS A HOME
There is a home,
That accommodate a shattered soul,
& mysteriously patch-make it into one piece, a whole.
To the pride & arrogant,
It is invisibly malignant,
Whereas to the invariably benevolent,
It is obvious & exclusively magnificent.
Although the outside look rough & unattractive
As though worn out from so much grief.
But in it is a great stock of wealth,
Love & good health.
It is a place of sanctuary & of peace.
The freshness of its atmosphere comes with so much ease.
The down-hearted trade her pain with it
& gains a huge profit of elevating love forthwith.
All dern are safe therein
With no sign of daring.
Comfortability in this home is at its pinnacle,
Yet it comes with a due of affordable value.
What is this haven
With the serenity as like a heaven?
This is not home for goats but for the sheep.
There is a home, it is called FRIENDSHIP.
Poroye Ezekiel Tobiloba (POET)
CEO, Palace of Exclusive Thoughts
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Comments
Barbara Writes
Wed, 2017-07-19 09:20
Nice theme
Structure is very important to your readers;
Break up into stanzas maybe of 4;
For example;
There's a home
I find hard to build;
every brick I place
slip away.
My cement is weak
it won't harden;
It's always wet
It never dries.
This is play on words to suggest how you can break up your poem structurally.
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YungPrinzeT
Wed, 2017-07-19 11:37
thanks Barbara but this is
thanks Barbara but this is more of a descriptive poem. like talking about the home called friendship.
about the stanza, I'll fix that. thank you, you've been helpful
author commentBarbara Writes
Wed, 2017-07-19 12:48
Welcome
Yeah I know. Great subject.
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