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Awestruck was I to find

In this time of misery

Age of darkness

An emotional revelation.

A color so obscure

From a creature divine.

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"upon a creatures divinity.."
words for me are coming back

creature's is a personification of subject
of course....Divinity is something a bit
more and less of is a state of
being rather then a solid noun description

descriptors are like shifting without a can be done..
a matter of looking at things..

rock is a rock
but it is also strata...metamorphic..
shift and rend..mute..and fragile..
smooth and polished
jagged and broken
rises to the earth and submerges
like a diving beast beneath
the tides at the edges of eternity

or.."on a creatures divinity"

almost like an oath or spell
this poem

I greatly like it in reading

Thank You!

For a creature divine:- should this be
"From a creature divine"
One of the Spirit spirits was asked if we could see him/her
There was a beautiful un describable blue light, we knew who it was.
This write is bordering on the other side to life and very good,
Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Not sure if I like it or not, but that's only a matter of personal opinion and not a reflection on the poem or its author.

Thanks for taking the time to comment guys, I always enjoy reading your responses. In truth the theme of this poem was intended to be entirely sexual. In the end it sounded more like some sort of direct angelic experience so I slapped the 'theophany' tag on it and sold it :) .Perhaps I should not have done that

"A light complexion, graceful carriage, and a bewitching smile- those constitute a woman's true worth"

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