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Thanks for your love

Submitted by Poem on Sun, 2016-06-12 14:58

All this while....,
I wrote poems like heap of soil,
They seemed like empty glasses,
But thanks to you, for the love,
They are now like flying dove.

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Review Request (Direction):

What did you think of my title?

How was my language use?

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Comments

Esker

Fri, 2016-06-24 21:17

the fertile of imaginative seeing

re reading this
I like its short concise
construct
its got the ground
and the sky in it
finally linked those
two together in
my head..
it was not commented
on for the entire list
so I wanted to put
it up here..

thank U!

Sparrow

Sat, 2016-06-25 03:45

Poem

Welcome to Neopoet I hope your stay with us will be all you wish for in poetry.
This is a place to lean and ask for help of any member they will be there for you.
Your first piece has so much in few words, I look forward to more from you,
Yours Ian.T (Sparrow)

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

raj

Sat, 2016-06-25 05:18

Welcome back Ms. Poem

Nice crisp and expressive poem...it could have been nicer though if the end words of each of the four verses were inter connected...but even other wise it does express what you wish to accomplish...

raj (sublime_ocean)

Poem

Sat, 2016-06-25 06:09