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Thankful (November contest)
I'm thankful for the gift of my two sons.
They made my life worthwhile. They are the ones
who gently prompted laughter from a frown,
those times I felt despondent, sad or down.
I'm thankful they were healthy, strong of limb
(It seemed I had my private seraphim)
and grew to adulthood warmhearted, kind -
the sort that stood defending those maligned.
I'm thankful for the passing of the years;
the opportunity to share our tears.
I'm thankful I can know a thousand joys
at just the thought and memory of my boys.
It's been, now, two long decades since one left,
bequeathing me a world of sense bereft.
But, though his going cut me like a knife,
I'm thankful I could share, with him, his life.
But, more than anything I'm thankful for,
is, when the other kingdom closed the door,
my second son was predestined to stay,
to brace me, when the other went away.
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Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story
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raj
Tue, 2015-11-03 13:23
Very, touching, sentimental,
Very, touching, sentimental, honest write...vividly expressive of something for which you are truly thankful....
Much love and hugs,
raj (sublime_ocean)
Barbara Writes
Tue, 2015-11-03 14:51
Touching
I have two boys and can't imagine losing one. They are so dear to me. Lovely thankful poem. Hope you the best in the contest.
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alidzain
Tue, 2015-11-03 13:42
Judy
wow. You're a strong contestant. All the best for the contest.
Alid
Rula
Tue, 2015-11-03 13:43
of course
You should be a proud mom dear Judy.
You're a winner anyway for raising them, aren't you?
The best to you too.
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Rula
Tue, 2015-11-03 14:19
BTW
I looked up the word "seriphim" but couldn't find it?
Is it a name ?
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Sparrow
Tue, 2015-11-03 18:54
Judy
A love of two, that reaches out from the now here to the infinity of always where we will all walk one day with unconditional love of all things, beautifully written,
Yours as always, Ian xx
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wesley snow
Tue, 2015-11-03 22:04
A Seraphim...
is a type of Angel. They are the guardsmen of The Essence. They surround the seat of God with swords drawn, their double set of wings keeping them always aloft in the Void.
This is common tradition and not necessarily Judea/Christian/Muslim tradition.
Like Cherubs (violent beggars), Seraphim are the Angels you most commonly see in Renaissance paintings such as Da Vinci's and Titian's.
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wesley snow
Tue, 2015-11-03 22:04
A Seraphim...
is a type of Angel. They are the guardsmen of The Essence. They surround the seat of God with swords drawn, their double set of wings keeping them always aloft in the Void.
This is common tradition and not necessarily Judea/Christian/Muslim tradition.
Like Cherubs (violent beggars), Seraphim are the Angels you most commonly see in Renaissance paintings such as Da Vinci's and Titian's.
W. H. Snow
A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley
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Barbara Writes
Tue, 2015-11-03 23:05
Cherubs
Violent beggars. That's a new one to me. Never heard that bf
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judyanne
Wed, 2015-11-04 05:05
thank you everybody
for all the lovely comments
Lol - didn't notice the typo - fixed now
No wonder you couldnt find the word Rula...
thanks Wes for pointing it out, and for explaining to Rula for me
Love judy
xxx
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author commentwesley snow
Wed, 2015-11-04 16:13
By the way,
it is a beautiful poem. Congratulations.
W. H. Snow
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judyanne
Thu, 2015-11-05 01:45
thanks Wes
Love ludy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
author commentjudyanne
Thu, 2015-11-05 01:45
thanks Wes
Love ludy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
author commentscribbler
Tue, 2015-12-01 18:07
Hi MM
Very good listing of things to be thankful for..........stan
judyanne
Tue, 2016-03-22 07:08
thanks Stan
Sorry for the tardiness of my reply
love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
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