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THANK YOU COVID-19

Thank you COVID
Because now we sit three in a cab
Thank you for the light
They would have choked us with heat
And make us pay for darkness.

Thank you for bringing us together
Thank you for the Air Conditioner
Thank you for the whips
The Everyday battle with hunger.

I know you have better plan of succour
I know of the palliatives
But like the evening sun it wasn’t made to shine
For the poor man.

The world had known that you are the boss
Even Trump and his absolute power
Could not question your orders
You’ve robbed the cabals to feed the poor.

Where will I even start to thank you,
Maybe you should stay a little longer
Maybe the little man don’t who know you are,
Maybe.

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Comments

Good one, chiori. I think the title is highly apt. The whole poem makes a lot of sense. You have an "a" missing in L1, S3, but easily fixed.
Perhaps a little tightning up would make it flow better. Are you sure you need the Caps?
That's all for now, I'll return.

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Know then thyself, presume not God to scan,
The proper study of Mankind is Man.
Plac’d on this isthmus of a middle state,
A being darkly wise, and rudely great….

An Essay On Man, III, Alexander Pope.

thank you Gracy

always remember to make a critique of other poems
using the hoe is not madness for nothing

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