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Tanka Acrostic Inspired By Recovery
Cocaine to my brain
Relief from fucking caring
A welcomed numbness
Craving for just one more hit
Knowing it was killing me
Style / type:
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
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Comments
weirdelf
Sun, 2014-05-11 15:17
Yep. been there with Madame Snow
20 odd years ago. Along with Vitamin H and everything else. I support you in your struggle, mate, it's worth it.
Fine acrostic. Is numbness the word you want there? I would apply that more to Vit H than Mm S.
cheers,
Jess
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IKnowNoBox
Sun, 2014-05-11 15:35
Thanks for the comment.
Yea the caine' of Cocaine is about numbing.. like it numbs the face, and gums.. I am glad to say that I am free of the hard drugs now for quiet sometime. My last bout was with Meth, and Oh boy did it send me down a twisted dark tunnel of psychosis. Perhaps I will venture to write a poem about that beast.. all in due time.. as I would want to capture the brutal beast with the right "film", and "camera".
In ink,
David
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