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Tanka Acrostic Inspired By Recovery

Cocaine to my brain
Relief from fucking caring
A welcomed numbness
Craving for just one more hit
Knowing it was killing me

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Structured: Eastern
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20 odd years ago. Along with Vitamin H and everything else. I support you in your struggle, mate, it's worth it.

Fine acrostic. Is numbness the word you want there? I would apply that more to Vit H than Mm S.

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Yea the caine' of Cocaine is about numbing.. like it numbs the face, and gums.. I am glad to say that I am free of the hard drugs now for quiet sometime. My last bout was with Meth, and Oh boy did it send me down a twisted dark tunnel of psychosis. Perhaps I will venture to write a poem about that beast.. all in due time.. as I would want to capture the brutal beast with the right "film", and "camera".

In ink,

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