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Darkness in the music, stood on my arms.
It was peaceful.

The wind, notes, running down, the key.

It was clever.

I stood on my both hands,
and smiled in glory.

Eyes at eyes,
Hands in fists,
Peaceful.

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Great imagery!. "Darkness in the music, stood on my arms. I like the way you personified the darkness as human being. Its an effective technique used in the poem. It also gives a vivid description to the reader to understand the experience of the writer.

Now let's look at the PUNCTUATION:
Punctuation actually aids the readers’ interpretation and also determines his/her breathe pauses.
Punctuation assists in organizing your words into discernible verses:
Encapsulates thoughts and ideas.
Ensures coherence and the presentation of meaning.
When it is wrongly used it distorts the meaning of the poem. Interestingly, many poets use punctuation marks without knowing why they used them; others just write their verses without using any marks at all, not deliberately, just because they do not know how and where to use them. Read your poem aloud and you will definitely get the fix well.

"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

in this line: I stood on my both hands, (I stood on both my hands)
I don't understand what you mean with this line: Eyes at eyes, perhaps you mean (Eyes on eyes?)
other than that I can find no fault with your poem. I agree with what Onyinechi has said to you, most eloquently. this is a right smart write.

always, Cat

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Well coming from someone who has played hundreds of concerts and a handful of big sold out dance halls, your eyes meet the audience eyes collectively from the stage.

My favorite is

Darkness in the music, stood on my arms…

So every so often performing or attending a concert has made all the hair on my body stand up. It’s a legitimate phenomenon You can look up.

Nice work.
Tim

Well done! Your opening line is my favorite. Reminds me of concert days with the air on my arm standing at attention when those notes hit just right. The peace brought to me by being in my element, surrounded by like minded individuals who didn't mind me being myself. For those few hours, I was free! Thank you for reminding me of those times. Great write.

~RoseBlack~

I like your piece.

I feel that there could be so much more written here, I am left with wanting to know more, either at the beginning, or some sort of continuation at the end of the piece.

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