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Take Me To the Otherside

Take me to the other side
where my brighter future
as you all now say lies

I have reached the zenith
which height that
none can relay

I take it as
many reached the top
I can now only fly over it
just send a 'copter to me

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content


We get to that other side soon enough. All say......none can say ? i think you need to work on these two lines a bit

any better
should I scrap it

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NO!!! don't scrap it! I hope we both have a pleasant and easy landing after the thrill of soaring over the heights!

*love, Cat

When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

O Cats

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