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A "Sweets for the Sweet" Sonnet

"Oh, dearest wife, restore my nights of bliss;
How is it that your heart now comes to rest
Without a flutter at my good-night kiss?
Should I not need to ask whom you like best?"
I toss and turn upon our marriage bed,
Accuse her of some wayward passion’s bloom—
Although she swears that she loves me. This said,
She moans, “O Henry!” in our moonlit room.
"But pray," I ask, "what can be finer than
My loving touch?" "It’s not what you might think,"
She then protests; "There is no other man
But you, dear one," she says with longing wink,
And then she sighs, and tells me how she misses—
O Henry bars and HERSHEY’S CHOCOLATE KISSES!

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I understand. Bad enough to hear another man's name, but to be taunted by the knowledge that a candy bar and pieces of chocolate are foremost in your wife's mind while lying next to you? Outrageous! I would find all those offending morsels
and do away with them, toot sweet! How dare they? However, I guess that it's not so bad, at least she isn't pining for a Jimmy Dean sausage!
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some wives have the strangest dreams. Here I am, Adonis reincarnated, only to be rejected in favor of some pieces of sweets--as though I'm not sweet enough. Maybe I should tell her about my dreams of chicks who used to raise the front hem of my tunic . . . now, who were they-- Well. there was Gina . . . . Hey, Geezer, thanks for reading my sonnet.
Jerry

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Hi Jerry, great sonnet, as usual. Both the title and content are amusing in a sad sort of way. My husband used to introduce me to his "girlfriends" when I finally had to put him in a nursing home. And yes, he was always waiting to see what "goodies" I'd brought him in my purse!
So you've touched tender memories, as I'm sure you've done with many readers.
Thanks for sharing your sonnets, best, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

I'm so pleased that my sonnet had brought a wistful smile upon your face. The contents of my sonnet are basically true, although a trifle exaggerated, and L. and I both have that proverbial sweet-tooth. As you know, I'm an octogenarian
and L. is much younger . . . I would hate to leave her behind pining. But our marriage is still beautiful, and I suspect that yours, too, must have been made in heaven. So, that's how it goes. Be well, and thank you very much for reading and commenting, dear.

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you scared me! right up until the ending lines, I was feeling outraged for you! LOL, you really took me by surprise! my chocolate of choice is Godiva, LOL! a fun read, thanks for this one!

*hugs, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

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thanks for laughing at the surprise ending of my tantalizing sonnet, lol. But you have an expensive passion--Godiva? They do have great assortments; yes, Lynda craves those, too, at 17 bucks for 15 pcs!! I can make do with a cheap Hershey's bar (because I'm a man, lol). Thanks, dear. See ya again,
Jerry

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we order them on-line at the Godiva web site. makes them less expensive that way, lol. we have no children and our expenses are slight. I get an allowance monthly, so I pay for them. I hate to shop, so the money adds up. we have one chocolate truffle per day when it comes to the close of his workday. I still enjoy a snickers bar once in awhile!

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When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

our pets have replaced our son who has a family of his own. But let me tell you, one cat and one dog will run into money as well. Fortunately, we are financially secure and can afford to keep them healthy and well fed. Felix, our solidly black cat would go well with the attire you are wearing in your avatar. But he isn't for sale at any price. So, you'll have to find another consort, lol. Oh, that's right; you have Steven, lol.
Speaking of shopping: We are off to raid Costco this morning. Later, I might do a poem named " Bell, Book and Candle," inspired by you, lol. Thanks for the visit, sweetie. Jerry

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I very much look forward to reading that future write ;)

we have five cats who are our children. we had six, but one passed away. she is much missed. her name is Vivian and she was a hymalayan. we still have Lucy! (and Morty and Shadow and Bennington and Beauregard)

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When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

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