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The sweet silver swallow

The sweet silver swallow
flys for tomorrow
Trying to leave all
It’s sorrow
behind.
For it soars
Towards the sun’s
Scintillating
Gates that holds
The stream of
future’ hopes.
and all
Past’s unaccomplished
Completely demolished
Dreams.

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well now what an improvement I see in your use of stanzas your poem is just lovely title is strong and your first line pulls that reader in to want to continue reading. well done!!

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Another gorgeous write, you have a beautiful pen hand. Such sorrow and hope entwined in this poem.

Thank you...Teddy

i hope your doing fine in this horrid time of mass hysteria

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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