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Sweet Emily two tone bitch

Submitted by chevyvent on Sat, 2018-12-01 19:30

let me enter nor rhyme to reason
its the changing of the season
proud to encounter drawer or the counter
music dear ash get a free pass;
time is for funny bring home the money
love is a strict thing play with my ding a ling
foster an encounter frig or the counter

she passes through the even groove
lay hold of the fountain
drive the magic mountain;
money for reason changing of the season
blame game to encounter a change of remedy

its easy to achieve
sudden break of the breeze
onto the common thief
nor sore of survival break in the rival
catch the new cupboard,

so soon to discover is it any wonderlet me enter nor rhyme to reason
its the changing of the season
proud to encounter drawer or the counter
music dear ash get a free pass;
time is for funny bring home the money
love is a strict thing play with my ding a ling
foster an encounter frig or the courage

so soon to discover is it any wonder

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IRiz

Sat, 2018-12-01 23:28

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i am sorry i don't like your lines
these words are insult to my intelligence:

time is for funny bring home the money
love is a strict thing play with my ding a ling

IRiz

Obadiah Grey

Sun, 2018-12-02 13:01

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I didn't really understand it, (but thats no big deal)
Did find it interesting though,
and if its an experimental piece,
well, more power to your elbow mate.

Can't see why this is misogynistic, perhaps it may be derogatory to, Emily. but not to woman in general.

Obi.

Obadiah Grey

Sun, 2018-12-02 13:01

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I didn't really understand it, (but thats no big deal)
Did find it interesting though,
and if its an experimental piece,
well, more power to your elbow mate.

Can't see why this is misogynistic, perhaps it may be derogatory to, Emily. but not to woman in general.

Obi.

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