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Swear Wear and Tear

All words used to curse
Creating feelings adverse
Dump them in a hearse

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While I am not advocating that everyone follow the Rhyku Rules, I would like to express my strong disapproval of the abusive and inconsiderate language of one of the members whose frequent use of four letter words is akin to a rebellious teen who wants to shock the adults nearby due to unresolved angst. This person should undergo counselling and anger management so that those of us who want to express our poems in a respectful setting do not have to be subjected to immature, intemperate and inconsiderate tantrums.

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You have phrased it very nicely. I, for my part will just ignore what I disapprove of very strongly - foul language. For your edification and in response to an earlier comment, English is my second language and I have an abiding respect for the language, literary classics and classic English Serials like Yes Minister. I feel that the great value of a good education is to provide the ability to communicate any idea, however popular or controversial in a civil manner. As poets, we are persons who should be easily able to discuss and debate the finer points in a fine manner. You have ably demonstrated the ability to do just that. Thank you for our valued input.

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about the rhythm. The first and third lines are fine but as for the second, I suggest dropping "that" from the start of the line and inject another word between "feelings" and "adverse."

Keith Logan
the happy chappy
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is good. This is now a smooth read. Well done.

Keith Logan
the happy chappy
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To obtain your approval

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sometimes just a removal like a fretwork
thing for music or notes shall do

could add...all words "for" curse...etc

great little ditty though!

the most of poetry I saw before interweb land
was in high school yearbooks and washroom
stalls on my travels...
seems even poetry there is dying out..

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