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swamp

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bulls bellow for mates
on floating water lily
tadpoles in shallows
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Style / type: 
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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THE MARK
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author comment

Great haiku, Mark. With the western form of 5-7-5. I understand that in Japan haikus are always in one line. Often used for letter writing.
But I feel the power of yours, with the bulls bellowing and the contrast with the lilies and tadpoles. Lovely.

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THE MARK
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If you take the time to read a poem then take the time to let the author know you were there. Study it and form an opinion as well, even if it means going back to it more than once. That is basic critique, what Neopoet is all about.

author comment

He was successful in his bellowing endeavours then..!

Obi.

Good stuff Mark - I really like the western form of haiku, and your imagery is well constructed here.

Cheers

Michael Anthony

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