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Surrogate

Submitted by Rosewood Apothecary on Mon, 2022-08-08 18:09

Somewhere deep within my core
Heart and mind and soul and more
Safe havens there in which I store
Endearing thoughts for evermore

Forever welcome at your door
Often counted, number four
Sleeping guest upon your floor
A place a felt I could be more

I could spread my wings and soar
An eagle circling distant shores
Bluffs break waves with crashing roars
That wash away invented flaws

So with these words I do implore
My gratitude for love you bore
And all the light that you foresaw
Upon a son that wasn’t yours

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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Last few words: 
This one is for my “other” mother and “other brothers”
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Editing - draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Ray Whitaker

Fri, 2022-08-12 19:03

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Real good on the poem, Tim. Touching.

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lovedly

Fri, 2022-08-12 23:35

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At times silence hurts more
a child birthing for a million reasons
she couldn't assure
PERHAPS!
I may not be able to assure

Candlewitch

Sat, 2022-08-13 05:28

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this is great! you were blessed to have such a wonderful family (and they were family through love, if not by blood) your piece radiates the feelings and respect for them.

*hugs, Cat

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