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A Surprise From Santa's Sac(k) - An Xmas Poem

Santa sits in his dark grotto
Without his underpants
He's got something on his mind
If he gets half a fucking chance.

A Mummy brings her child to see him
But it's not the lad he's after.
Santa wants to grab his buxom Mum
And OH how he wants to shaft her.

Santa hands the lad to his elf
And drags Mum round the back
He has a nice present for her:
A load of semen from his sac.

After the Christmas deed is done,
The child goes off with his mother;
They don't know in nine months' time
He'll have a bastard brother.

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Edna, this struck me as juvenile. Something that a 14 year old that has a stack of MAD Magazines on the floor near his bed might come up with.
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...disagree, then. I wouldn't like to meet a 14 year old who knew about Santa's sac.

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Edna
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I did find the title to be crafty..
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Hi, I came over to read your poem and find that you've got excellent end rhymes. But the subject doesn't atract me, don't know why, but it's off putting. Just saying.
Peace, Gracy

Gracy

...Santa as a Weinstein type but if I were looking for a job to hide pervy inclinations, I'd go for Santa. Or maybe a priest or a boy scout leader.

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Edna
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how true.Though I find it rather good with rhyme, I didn't enjoy the theme. Just sayin' ~ Geezer.
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...is perhaps a little risqué...

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Edna
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