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Supersonic

If love is a drug
Then I'm as high as a kite
Reaching for the stars

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Senryu
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Not Explicit Content

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and no where to go, but up. How invigorating to be in love!
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Thank you...Teddy

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very crisp poem. If you intended this to be a Senryu (5-7-5), then you need to look at line two which is 8 syllables because I'm is 2 syllables instead of seven....it could be "then I soar high as a kite" just a suggestion..i love short poems...

be well...

raj (sublime_ocean)

On this occasion "I'm" is one syllable, but thank you for your eagle eyes.

Thank you...Teddy

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Hello, Teddy,
Supersonic! That's a whole lotta love! Very cool title for a very joyful Senryu.
Thank you!
L

I am so pleased you have enjoyed this.
I was inspired by the recent comet over head.

Thank you...Teddy

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Nice!
L

I am so pleased you have enjoyed this.
I was inspired by the recent comet over head.

Thank you...Teddy

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I got here late sorry
others have already said it
nice to see such an up write

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Thank you, you are always in time, so glad you like it.

Thank you...Teddy

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Hello Teddy, I love senryus, yours is perfect. Love is certainly like reaching for the stars. The title, Supersonic, is perfect, although I believe the senryu doesn't usually have a title. Dunno...
Best, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

I am thrilled you enjoyed the ride, a traditional senryu doesn't have to have a title but I find for my style I like them. The same applies for haiku. It's up to the writer , maybe I should try one without to see if it works, just for fun.

Thank you...Teddy

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I think Neopoet won't let you submit a poem without a title, unless you mention it as \Senryu 1, 2 and so on if you are to post more than one over a period or just put a dot in the title field :)

be well..

raj (sublime_ocean)

Thank you, I didn't know so that's useful I would just put senryu as the title then, you should try one with me then, we can see the difference of how we interpret it. Could be fun anyway

Thank you...Teddy

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Itty bitty poem with an itty bitty punch. I hope you never lose this feeling.

Jess

Hello, lovely to see you, thank you, I do love Senryu, this one was inspired by a comet that apparently I saw last week. Well it was definately up there anyway.

Thank you...Teddy

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