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Supersonic
If love is a drug
Then I'm as high as a kite
Reaching for the stars
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Florence (Italy)
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Those who have the courage to inspire, Oscar Wilde, Dante Alighieri and William Blake, are definately amongst my favourites.
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Geezer
Sun, 2020-07-26 12:18
Perfect form...
and no where to go, but up. How invigorating to be in love!
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Teddy15
Sun, 2020-07-26 13:20
Dear Geezer
Thank you my friend.
Thank you...Teddy
author commentraj
Sun, 2020-07-26 13:03
Hi Teddy
very crisp poem. If you intended this to be a Senryu (5-7-5), then you need to look at line two which is 8 syllables because I'm is 2 syllables instead of seven....it could be "then I soar high as a kite" just a suggestion..i love short poems...
be well...
raj (sublime_ocean)
Teddy15
Sun, 2020-07-26 13:22
Dear Raj
On this occasion "I'm" is one syllable, but thank you for your eagle eyes.
Thank you...Teddy
author commentLavender
Sun, 2020-07-26 13:32
Supersonic
Hello, Teddy,
Supersonic! That's a whole lotta love! Very cool title for a very joyful Senryu.
Thank you!
L
Teddy15
Sun, 2020-07-26 13:38
Dear lavender
I am so pleased you have enjoyed this.
I was inspired by the recent comet over head.
Thank you...Teddy
author commentLavender
Sun, 2020-07-26 13:49
Aha!
Nice!
L
Teddy15
Sun, 2020-07-26 13:40
Dear lavender
I am so pleased you have enjoyed this.
I was inspired by the recent comet over head.
Thank you...Teddy
author commentc lynn brooks
Sun, 2020-07-26 15:06
Teddy
I got here late sorry
others have already said it
nice to see such an up write
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Teddy15
Sun, 2020-07-26 15:51
Dear C Lynn Brooks
Thank you, you are always in time, so glad you like it.
Thank you...Teddy
author commentGracy
Mon, 2020-07-27 11:36
Hello Teddy, I love senryus,
Hello Teddy, I love senryus, yours is perfect. Love is certainly like reaching for the stars. The title, Supersonic, is perfect, although I believe the senryu doesn't usually have a title. Dunno...
Best, Gracy
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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury
Teddy15
Mon, 2020-07-27 12:14
Dear gracy
I am thrilled you enjoyed the ride, a traditional senryu doesn't have to have a title but I find for my style I like them. The same applies for haiku. It's up to the writer , maybe I should try one without to see if it works, just for fun.
Thank you...Teddy
author commentraj
Mon, 2020-07-27 12:17
Hi Teeddy
I think Neopoet won't let you submit a poem without a title, unless you mention it as \Senryu 1, 2 and so on if you are to post more than one over a period or just put a dot in the title field :)
be well..
raj (sublime_ocean)
Teddy15
Mon, 2020-07-27 12:32
Dear Raj
Thank you, I didn't know so that's useful I would just put senryu as the title then, you should try one with me then, we can see the difference of how we interpret it. Could be fun anyway
Thank you...Teddy
author commentinfinite_dwarf
Mon, 2020-07-27 13:41
Teddy
Itty bitty poem with an itty bitty punch. I hope you never lose this feeling.
Jess
Teddy15
Mon, 2020-07-27 13:57
Dear Jess
Hello, lovely to see you, thank you, I do love Senryu, this one was inspired by a comet that apparently I saw last week. Well it was definately up there anyway.
Thank you...Teddy
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