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The passion inside struck her down
Taking back what's hers from start
Infectious smile with glow for skin
Spoke the residents of London town

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I=Iamb, A=Anapaest, T=Trochee, D=Dactyl, Am=Amphibrach, S=Spondee, P=Pyrrhic, C=Catalexis, ~ = Caesura, [x= feet per line] (exclamation marks indicate perfect meter)

The pass/ion inside/ struck her/ down [I, A, T, C, x4]
Taking/ back what's/ hers from/ start [T, T, T, C, x4]
Infec/tious smile/ with glow/ for skin [I, I, I, I , x4 perfect Iambic Tetrameter!]
Spoke the/ resid/ents of/ London/ town [T, T, T, C, x4]

A catalexis is fine so lines 2 and 4 are good Trochaic Tetrameter but the point is to try to stick to one metric form throughout. Again I'll read it twice, perhaps our accents are very different.

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