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SUNKU AT LAST

I'm used
to people
picking pebbles.

To aim,
Throw at me,
but I still live.

Sunku
I bring to
silence critics.

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I liked this and a poetic message of getting back at people who used you in few words. Fits the form and the intent of the form as well

Regards...

raj (sublime_ocean)

I appreciate

Hommies

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