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The Sun is Always Rising, Red and Huge

I had a farm in Africa at the foot of the Ngong Hills...
Well, not really, I just adore
that first line of Isak's book.
I wanted a love like the one she
had. I could taste it. Smell it, like fresh
soap and old leather.
I wanted music in the tall grass, bending
to my wishes.
I wanted to dance with your hands on my
hips, close enough to see stars migrating
from each passing breeze.
I admired the respect of silence
and a smile
that could kill me.
I imagined memories to put into cages while lions
roamed on my lover's grave. But it is kale that
grows wild on a grave in Munich, and time has no heartbeat
though distance does.

And if there was too much usefulness and not
enough imagination on my part, it's because you died
and I lived. Australia is a land too far and
away, but if I had wings, I'd fly there.

Australia is my bore worm, eating my brains for just
deserts, she's my calliope, round and round she
goes, I try to catch the tail of the white unicorn,
but the Northern Lights do me in and shadow
puppets of my purpose break seeds
growing in the flatlands where wheat is golden
and the sun is always rising, red and huge,
a giant dwarf in the galaxy I create, leaf
by leaf.

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I like the visual imagery this poem creates. But I do feel that this would be more fitting for prose than poetry. It reads more like a beautiful story. Anyways, keep writing!

and insightful.

But I wish you would learn to write poetry. Try a few workshops, without attacking their basic premises.
Please.
You could be better than brilliant.

cheers,
Jess
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I speak with too arrogant a voice too often.
I missed the poetry of this, the purest of poetry, the beauty and elegance of the words themselves, on first reading.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

Cheers, Jess & RB.... my poetry is what it is and does what it does. It's all subject to interpretation, isn't it?

Big hugs.

~A

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A beautifully put, story that gathers from the African velt to many places seen with a different light,
if this is not a poetic stream then I shall build a bridge across it to see when it changes form, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

"...my poetry is what it is and does what it does. It's all subject to interpretation, isn't it?"

Well said,

I also was taken by this piece.No better comment I could give than to ditto Jess' second look.

Beauty is camelion.

Joe

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