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Summer Jobs

I wake up to an often-ugly world,
but I am frequently reminded
there is an opposite if I pay attention
to the many creatures and their summer toil

Egrets, with punk-rock crowns,
blazing white atop their heads
Seeking low tide meals along the inlet
Moving with grace, smooth like glass

And butterflies with delicate amber wings,
determined to alight on welcoming flowers
as they go about instinctive labors
in their world without intolerance

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but I would have more! Maybe another analogy or two? ~ Geezer.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
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Thanks Geez! Leave them wanting more, right?

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Michael Anthony

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I think it’s fine. (No offense Geez) I like the short format. It lets me fill in the blanks.

Tim

taken Tim. ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

Appreciate the visit Tim - thank you!

Best

Michael Anthony

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And great title!

you remind me of Newton's theories. and I thank you for it. for every action, there is an equal and opposite reaction. my favorite lines are:

as they go about instinctive labors
in their world without intolerance

*hugs, Cat

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And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

Glad you liked this Cat! I struggled a bit with the last word - hatred - judgment - and a few other like words were considered. Settled on intolerance since it seems to me to be an "umbrella" word, where much of the world's ills seem to eminate.

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Michael Anthony

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