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AS SUMMER FADES (September contest)

An acorn hits my metal roof
rolls to the eave, drops to the ground.
These loud impacts reveal the truth
that autumn soon will be around
as summer slowly loses sway.

And deer antlers have lost velvet
allowing them to thrash small trees
although the rut is not here yet.
Fall is heartless in its tease
as shadows lengthen day by day.

Golden rod and ragweed bloom
adding their scent and allergies.
They also foretell summer's doom
with each cough and sudden sneeze.
Migrating flocks will soon come this way.

I recall over three score years
of summers giving way to fall.
Some memories come with silent tears
for those who've answered their last call.
Though they are gone their memories stay.

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Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Thoughts of summers sad demise
As autumn brings forth, dormant cries
Natures changes well depicted
With future events to be inflicted
Thank you kindly

I appreciate your dropping by for a read........stan

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but ur sponsor also

Me and stupid typos refuse to be parted lol. Good thing there are other eagle eyes around to spot the typos I miss........stan

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And as such I am not eligible to win but can post just for fun

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but what if the judge picks urs
I suppose they would not know
who composed what

stated many times on stream and in comments that since I'm the contest director that I'm not eligible to win. Each monthly judge is also informed of this when they are chosen. So my entries are just for fun......stan

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my bald head has holes
not as in a sponge

but hollow pipes

LARGE DRAIN
GARBAGE ONES
RFLOL ONNNNNNNNNNNNNN

nice one
well constructed

always remember to make a critique of other poems
using the hoe is not madness for nothing

I am pleased you like this........stan

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Where do I start. This is a gorgeous poem I love it !! and yes Jess I said your dreaded L word lol. Really good to read you again. Still getting my bearings again be prepared for a more thorough critique next time xxx

Love Sis xxxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

It is great to see you pop up on my screen again. And you can say whatever you want, Jess can just grit his teeth lol. I hope your return is a sign that you are getting better............stan

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have been missing your comments and works
hope ur better now

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