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Summer’s Song

So he continued to press on,
always seeking opportunities for growth;
reading the language of the universe.

It was in this state,
whilst driving down the road,
chance brought forth
a beauty to behold.

The seed pods of a wisteria
That climbed an old ash
were swaying in the breeze,
clanging like so many wind chimes.

And like himself,
summer’s song did carry on.

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Observational piece. Something I saw whilst driving and thinking. iPhone journal stuff. Tim
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I love this small piece of sweetness. for some reason unknown, I wanted to read it with an Irish accent. from the start, it tripped along nicely, leading me down the path to a well timed (poetically speaking) ending which I liked best!

And like himself,
summer’s song did carry on.
I visualize your muse sitting on your shoulder, with her ankles crossed, whispering in your ear!

*soft smiles ;) Cat

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I love this song, truly from the starting of this summer's song to the end I love please keep on the great work

I can feel the high - energy and chill moods.

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