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Subjectivity

Submitted by William Saint George on Mon, 2012-03-05 08:18

‎"The beauty of subjectivity
Is everybody gains.
It makes the bars of captivity
Decorated window panes.

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Review Request (Direction):

How was my language use?

How does this theme appeal to you?

Last few words:

I had a program recently with a group of writers. It was called "Writer's Block Unlocked." I tried to write a poem in response to a poem prompt. I failed. This is all I could come up with.

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Comments

Geezer

Mon, 2012-03-05 20:30

I would love...

to see this expanded upon. It stands well on the few lines that you have written, but you could do well to think about how those decorated window panes might affect someone looking at or through them. ~ Gee

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William Saint George

Tue, 2012-04-10 12:35

That will be saved for a much

That will be saved for a much more thorough piece. I'v found that appending to my older poems leaves me with an incomplete feeling. Will look at it. Thanks.

No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot

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Eduardo Cruz

Mon, 2012-03-05 20:55