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sub-harmonic

immersed in rich and bright illusion’s flow
here where we share a dizzy dreaming sea
within the now’s enfoldment’s gentle glow
before the birth of what’s about to be
as yesterday, today and, too, tomorrow
all breathe together forming temporal tides
and create, thus, a path for us to follow
the damaged centre’s closest friend abides

with metronome that beats both slow and fast
travails the master healer, time again
upon the wounds that live within the past
each tick a stitch to mend, divesting pain
regenerating throughout all the decades
while leaving not a scar upon the veil
until internal cyclic horror fades
and one is free, once more, to seek the grail
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This works on multiple levels and nails every one. As a seascape description, atypical enough to not be cliche yet recognizable. The metronome analogy, as a recorder of passage of time and hence a recorder of healing. Not a missed note. I'm going to have to get your book. Great work!

Ron

Blue Demon77

"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."

The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath

for the in-depth comments

but let me warn you - my book isn't a poetry one
hope you still want to read it though :)

lol - i am in the process of re-writing the book as an epic poem - the write so far is on one of my blogs, called (surprise, surprise) 'epic' lol - for want of a title as yet

thanks again ron
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

author comment

A deep write of complex parts bringing together all parts to become one.
I was expecting something different as we use to deal with Sub Harmonics in the radios we used and the knowledge of how they worked with a Pure Crystal as their base yet there in the higher levels were sounds not heard and then in the sub zone sounds that though not heard you became aware of.
Well done young lady the theme was a change from love odes or whatever, Yours Ian.T
PS:- it sounds as if you are searching everywhere for an answer, that one day will ring with truth and purity, you will then cry a rainbow. x

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

i NEVER write love poems :)

- and not still searching ian...
i have already cried my rainbow
just write about it now :)
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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I hope that beautiful peace becomes more than a part of you.
It is strange that when this happens it gives you the ability to deal with many things, and to write of more, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

These are the lines that resonated with me:

upon the wounds that live within the past
each tick a stitch to mend, divesting pain
regenerating throughout all the decades
while leaving not a scar upon the veil

very well done
love, Cat

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love judy
xxxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

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