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a sub bat tickle

a sub bat tickle

we all are simply
specks of emotions
falling down in tons
like the Niagara Falls
or
merging with the ocean
in Sydney
where friends I have many

dispensable are we all
short big or small

AND
most importantly
the root cause of unhappiness
is
seeing another man
with closed eyes

on top of the hill
with his superlatives
romping around him
may be
he has nothing
underneath....

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I was curious as to how you meant to use the word: superlatives. So, I went to reaffirm my knowledge of the word, finding that you chose a word that had the meaning fitting and used it well. I especially liked, your asking if there were anything underneath the man. ~ Gee.

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superlatives
are high tone attachments

like Doctorate of...
PhD
mHd etc
big man ECONOMIST
PHILANTHROPIST
JURIST
FNA*
just any of those things which sound
ATOMISH

*Clarification of your doubt here only

Fuck all Know All
be happy words just flow down me
then many verify gladly

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