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In the Study One Night With Single Malt

I saw a "once upon a time" today
become a story on the evening news
and I agonized that such elation
would devolve into routine tragedy,
and puzzled over the circumstances
and speculated on the injuries
that would bleed the joy and pale the wonder
and forsake the corpse of "ever after"
to lie, dimmed, beside the lifeless body
of joy dissolved in a vat of despair
while "happily" wept the heart wrenching tears
of a future barren and sown with salt.
I shook my head, quietly, as I sipped
my scotch and randomly changed the channel.

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Structured: Eastern
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Comments

You want the raw truth and that's I cant help improve this, its bloody good, though I thought the ending was a little soft, I wanted an epiphany but that's just me...always looking for answers...

I said the other day, I don't know what your doing or where all this is coming from, please don't stop now

I am thoroughly enjoying the journey

love Jayne x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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