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strange dreams
I'm drifting to dream
Falling wounds opened tonight
Awake to sunshine
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BlueDemon77
Fri, 2012-12-28 13:00
Interesting and economical
I must admit it means one thing or I have a dirty mind. Either way, Bravo to you :)
Ron
Blue Demon77
"What I want is to be what I was before the knife,
before the brooch pin, before the salve, fixed me in this parenthesis:
Horses fluent in the wind. A place, a time gone out of mind."
The Eye Mote-Sylvia Plath
Seren
Sun, 2012-12-30 01:41
Ron
Lol it could mean lots of things given some thought .... Thanks for the read and comment much appreciated
Love Jc x
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
scribbler
Fri, 2012-12-28 15:26
Hello
Nice senryu. First line might be a bit better stated but then again that might just be me lol................stan
Seren
Sun, 2012-12-30 01:43
Stan
I will give it some thought see what I can come up with thanks for the read and comment
Regards Jc x
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Ian.T
Fri, 2012-12-28 18:44
Jayne
A good picture, but those dreams I am sad that they are troubling, time to drag the sunshine into the evening time.
Suggest that some good music may rest the memory and change, the hurt felt to heart felt.
Easy to say, hard to do, but things one day will sort out their position in this realm, Yours Ian
PS:- cryptic, but I know you will understand, walk a while barefoot on the soil we are but a thought away.
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Seren
Sun, 2012-12-30 01:47
Ian
I have good dreams floating round atm I will run barefoot tonight smiles ...this is hard to do on my phone lol
You have a great new year
Love always Jc xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats