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Stones (imagery workshop)

The tangible weight of centuries nestled in the palm of your hand.

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that scribbler guy is a huge pain in the butt ain't he? lol

I enjoyed this one very much.
Love the connection with ages past.
Jx

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Wow all of us, under Stan's guidance, are on a winner here.
My favourite aphorism about poetry, actually said by Eisenstein in reference to film, is that the art is "ruthless elimination of the inessential". Conversely, imagery provides the potential for maximisation of meaning in minimum words.
Gonna repost this on the workshop thread.

cheers,
Jess
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With a touch of Blake (conscious?) - from "Auguries of innocence" no less:

Hold Infinity in the palm of your hand
And Eternity in an hour

But condensed even further - wonderful line.

Thanks,

Chris.

Chris Hall - Tasmania

Grossbooted draymen rolled barrels dullthudding out of Prince's stores and bumped them up on the brewery float. On the brewery float bumped dullthudding barrels rolled by grossbooted draymen out of Prince's stores.

sir.

cheers,
Jess
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The only thing I'd suggest is changing centuries to eons. But I Really like this......stan

The unfolding of unfathomable depths of reality from a single sentence.
Most very excellently well done.

Respectfully, Jim

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The unfolding of unfathomable depths of reality from a single sentence.
Most very excellently well done.

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

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