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The Stone ( Imagery Workshop-one line)

Submitted by Rula on Mon, 2017-06-26 12:41

Pitiful mute rocks roll down silently.

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Mon, 2017-06-26 16:11

Not sure I've ever known rocks to roll silently but there IS a lot of imagery here

Mon, 2017-06-26 16:18

should have used stones instead of rocks. It works better I think?

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Mon, 2017-06-26 17:48

I was told just one, but the verse is clear as gravity.

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Mon, 2017-06-26 17:52

And, yes, a single stone is preferable

Mon, 2017-06-26 18:55

I thought tears worked slightly better than rocks in this.
It's funny isn't it, how we all describe the one thing so completely differently.
Jx

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