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Startled
Awakened, startled late at night
by a strange and sudden sound.
An airplane crash? A chainsaw roaring?
Full wakefulness disspells all fright
for it's only Susan snoring.
Style / type:
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity):
Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Last few words:
For some reason my better half sees little humor in this one lol.......
Editing stage:
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Sparrow
Tue, 2016-03-08 19:43
Stan
Now you are in trouble, and not even a poetic theme just a protest of amnesic proportions lol,
You may have to go and have your body mended several times before forgiveness is given.
Another of our poets taken to their bed, but I guess your bed will be in the Dog house lol,
Take care both and try to enjoy , Makes me smile as I wend my way to another snore zone,
Yours as always Ian
ROTFLMAO---!!!
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scribbler
Tue, 2016-03-08 22:29
lol
It has actually become comforting to wake up at night and hear her sawing logs . Of course there Are times when she bulldozes them lmao........stan
author commentlovedly
Wed, 2016-03-09 12:38
save ur skin
Stan
she may saw it by her loud snoring
I am the ONLY record holder on snores
no one can challenge me
at times my snores too
awaken me
can you hear me snoring !
scribbler
Wed, 2016-03-09 16:44
I
No NOT snore regardless what Susan might claim. The mirror cracked on its own and the dishes rattled off the shelves for a Unknown reason lmsao...........stan
author commentSparrow
Wed, 2016-03-09 19:06
Stan
Now we know why the Atlantic Ocean has so many waves especially when the Americas are asleep..
La La
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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti
Seren
Thu, 2016-03-10 12:12
Has she slapped you yet lmfao
Has she slapped you yet lmfao !!
beautifully funny poem for your loves snoring !!
enjoyed it and its a nice high note to go to bed on
love always Sis xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
scribbler
Thu, 2016-03-10 15:32
Not yet
But there Are occasional "I'm asleep and "accidentally" kicked you episodes lol. Still can't understand why she doesn't see the humor in this scribble........stan
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